Today I'm lucky to be alive, it was a normal day work,at the Brussels airport until two black vans broke through the fenced area. I heard a loud noise I saw pieces of the fence flying everywhere to the Swiss bound plane. The two black vans looked like police vans so they must have been police officers until they got out and flashed machine guns at us. I felt so scared and a little confused because I didn't know what was going on and they were dressed as police officers and were pointing a gun at me. The eight men got out of the two vans and boarded the cargo area of the plane. I knew that the diamonds were on the plane, but what was i suppose do? I was being held at gunpoint, my heart was pounding and beating so fast, It was like I was dying. I was scared, but then it was over in a matter of five minutes.
The robbers made off with 50 millions dollars worth of diamond. The diamond were being transported from Antwerp to Zurich. It was uncommon for diamond to go through this airport. as a security officer I think they might have had an inside man or a really good connection, but when I was being held at gunpoint I didn't recognize any of the people that were stealing the diamonds.
February 19,2013
Today the police were investigating the broken fence and the plane. They found a burnt-out vehicle late on Monday night after I went home. The police were asking everyone what they saw but everybody said the same thing “I saw two black vans charge the gate then eight men got out and flashed machine guns but they did not fire.” or they said “That it well organized to only take five minutes.” well i think the thieves who did this knew a lot of information, or must have had someone who knew that the diamonds were going to be transported at the airport ,I think this because the diamond heist was really planned out and very well organized.The diamond thieves must have not want it all because they only took one-hundred and twenty packages and the left the rest.
But today i had to talk with the police because i was held at gunpoint and they wanted to know everything that i saw and i told them everything from when they broke through the fence and to when they fled the scene.
I like the main character, he/she was mostly clear with the description of the thieves coming and how scared the character was. I was being held at gunpoint, my heart was pounding and beating so fast, It was like I was dying.
ReplyDeleteI felt like the theme was about human relations, that they aren`t as good as people should be. flashed machine guns at us.
but when I was being held at gunpoint I didn't recognize any of the people that were stealing the diamonds.
“I saw two black vans charge the gate then eight men got out and flashed machine guns but they did not fire.”
I liked the story i felt like i almost could be at the scene when the thieves were taking the diamonds and how scared the character was.
I really like your description of the setting in your story. I could see the van crashing through the gates of the airport as well as how scared the main character would be to be held at gun point. Another thing I thought was interesting was how you have a lot of the guards perspective and thoughts in the story, "I knew that the diamonds were on the plane, but what was i suppose do?" I really liked this line, it puts you in the mind of that person!
ReplyDeleteThe theme was kind of hard for me to figure out at first because the story was so short, but I think the theme is how even though people can seem like great people it is not always the truth. I see this in your story when you say, "as a security officer I think they might have had an inside man..." Another example that I see is "Well i think the thieves who did this knew a lot of information, or must have had someone who knew that the diamonds were going to be transported at the airport." These examples show me that they suspect that it was someone in the airport.
ReplyDeletePersonally, I thought you included facts very well in it! An image that stuck in my mind was when you said, "I heard a loud noise I saw pieces of the fence flying everywhere to the Swiss bound plane." I really liked the part with the fence pieces flying everywhere. I learned that they don't know the people who actually committed the diamond heist and that they most likely had an inside person who knew about what all was going on.
ReplyDeleteSome little things that could maybe help you out in the future could be fixing the little grammar and spelling issues for starters. Another thing that I would suggest doing would be to include more sensory images or a little bit longer plot line. Then it will be able to visualize as well as understand the theme better. You did a great job!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite part of the story was again in the beginning when you say that the vans bust through the fence and the pieces fly everywhere. How you can't believe that it is actually happening and how scared the guard was! I thought this part of your story included some good description.
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